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[The Jennifer Colony]

hmm ok i read the first chapter...it suprised me coz it was way sexy at the beginning the character names are good and i can see that youve drawn from phantom of the opera...im not amazingly educated in the field but i know lestat is from the vampire chronicles and alucard i knowof as a character from hellsing a japanese anime while reading it a very distinct style hit me coz when i read stuff i envision it which is why i write my stuff as scripts and stuff and go into detail on the scenery when i read the first part and you were describing what alicia looked like i could really imagine her and i knew she was a vampire befor you said it the trivium shirt thing was very funny i liked that the wierd thing is that even tho u obviously drew from phantom..the way you had wrote it made me think of an original character first befor realising it was phantom esque and thats gud coz it feels like its own thing..i dont know if durk and the rest are all of your own creation i think it could stand well withou the lestat and alucard thing but i know when im writing it helps to link things to make what ur writing seem worthy enough to you coz no one likes thier own writing tho i normally get rid of the links at the end...however that aside im not telling you what to do i love what ive read so far and im very happy that i can envision it as something totally unique..even when i read novels i imagine characters and stuff that the book talks about but i never really pik up on anything unique about the characters or a feel of them very often as i did with your story right away i even imagined the whole place that alicia was in like id been there even tho there wasnt muchdescription of the place she was..i also the stances she did and the way she moved..and i loved it that she was french in one of my stories i have a french android but anyway it made everything a lot more sexy and i think it was really good and i imagine crovat as not wearing a phantom mask but a likeness phantom mask as his own unique character so very well done...when im directing movies and such u can come to me with ur story lol its an envsionists dream :) and i dont think its just coz i envison stuff anyway i know it has something to do with the way you write it so very well done.