[The Jennifer Colony]

okies i read your third chapter...and like the other two it is good i enjoyed it with the inclusion of loki and crovat the characters seem to get a lot more intresing in looks and attitude feelings between alicia and crovat seem right and well done especially at the end when crovat wonders "how could he have thought that of alicia" it feels very human and makes it all feel realistic to have such feelings in te story and its good that all of the characters seem to have a history which makes them more intresting to follow and it shows that they werent all jst made to die lie in slasher films when you know they are gonna die it makes everything feel 3d in the way they work and its also very well done tat all of the characters are their own and that they dont all have the same personality and aside from the story that the characters arefollowing to also follow the characters themselves is a rare thing to be able to read because not many stories seem to do that :)

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